How wonderful. There is a whole genre of literature about absent-minded intellectuals falling or tripping up. You capture the universal experience beautifully. I love the opening line with its suggestion of exclaiming a curse at the same time as setting the scene. The broken lower case i in the second line cleverly captures the instant of tripping. And the final line triumphantly sees the poet take inspiration from the fall, rhyming the last two words. Great stuff as usual Polona.
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__Gotta watch where your goin'... each and every step!
Nice!
__I have a few "trippin' haiku" somewhere in one of my old scribble books.
indeed, especially when the head is full of ideas that can't quite materialise...
hope you find some of those without having to repeat the action :-)
How wonderful. There is a whole genre of literature about absent-minded intellectuals falling or tripping up.
You capture the universal experience beautifully. I love the opening line with its suggestion of exclaiming a curse at the same time as setting the scene. The broken lower case i in the second line cleverly captures the instant of tripping. And the final line triumphantly sees the poet take inspiration from the fall, rhyming the last two words. Great stuff as usual Polona.
Strider
hehe, thanks again, Strider.
spruce was indeed a deliberate choice for the assonance
Made me smile. It's so easy to get into trouble when we're busy spotting poetic opportunities.
I almost walked into a hotel by accident yesterday while craning my neck to look at the ivy covering the building.
i think most of us would have stories to tell about getting into an awkward situation while being distracted by one thing or another...
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